How could I make this sounds smoother? Or how can I connect the two sentences: 'I envisioned my high school in Texas to be big and advanced in every way, just like the high school that I would have gone to in Michigan. A school that offers a good education and a plethora of electives, clubs, and activities is a school that can go far in its success.'

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Avery York

25 March, 15:08

How could I make this sounds smoother? Or how can I connect the two sentences: 'I envisioned my high school in Texas to be big and advanced in every way, just like the high school that I would have gone to in Michigan. A school that offers a good education and a plethora of electives, clubs, and activities is a school that can go far in its success.'

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Nena · Answer 1

Everything in bold is what i corrected or added!

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'I envisioned my High School in Texas to be as big and as advanced in every way, just like the High School that I would have had to go to in Michigan. A school that offers an amazing education system and a surfeit amount of electives, extracurricular clubs, and activities. A school that can go far in its success and mine.'