Which sentence below is written most concisely?

a. Government leaders, and the like, are inclined toward mentioning the creation of new jobs, claiming that these jobs indicate a strong economy, but often ignore to mention the fact that low wage jobs without benefits and security have replaced many good jobs.

b. Government leaders like to mention the creation of new jobs and claim that these new jobs indicate a strong economy. They do not add that low-wage jobs without benefits and security often replace many good jobs.

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Spookey

29 May, 21:58

Which sentence below is written most concisely?

a. Government leaders, and the like, are inclined toward mentioning the creation of new jobs, claiming that these jobs indicate a strong economy, but often ignore to mention the fact that low wage jobs without benefits and security have replaced many good jobs.

b. Government leaders like to mention the creation of new jobs and claim that these new jobs indicate a strong economy. They do not add that low-wage jobs without benefits and security often replace many good jobs.

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Aylin Yoder · Answer 1

b. Government leaders like to mention the creation of new jobs and claim that these new jobs indicate a strong economy. They do not add that low-wage jobs without benefits and security often replace many good jobs.

A concise sentence is one that eliminates wordiness and gets rid of extra phrases or clauses that are not pertinent to the content or delivery of the sentence. In option A phrases such as "and the like", "the fact that", and "inclined toward" are extra and not necessary to the sentence. Option B is the best choice because it eliminates the wordiness and extra phrases to make the sentence as clear and direct as possible.