The baker donated bread to the fund-raiser in a large box. Which is the best revision of this sentence? In a large box, the baker donated bread to the fund-raiser. The baker donated to the fund-raiser bread in a large box. The baker donated a large box of bread to the fund-raiser. In a large box, the fund-raiser had bread donated by the baker.

The best revision of the sentence is the following one: The baker donated a large box of bread to the fund-raiser.

Explanation:

The prepositional phrase "of bread" establishes that the large box donated by the baker contains bread. Therefore, it is unnecessary to use the PP denoting location "in a large box" and the NP denoting the donation "bread" if these two meaning components can be combined in the NP "a large box of bread". This NP entails that the baker has donated bread and the it has been given away in a large box.

The baker donated a large box of bread to the fundraiser