Tejas decided to rewrite the sentence

The crowd yelled, and they jumped up when the buzzer went off.

as

When the buzzer sounded, the cheering fans leaped to their feet in excitement.

Was Tejas correct in making the revision?

A) No, because the new sentence is much too long.

B) Yes, because the new sentence adds vivid language.

C) Yes, because the new sentence is longer than the first.

D) No, because the new sentence is not as clear as the firs

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Khalil Martinez

19 January, 08:05

Tejas decided to rewrite the sentence

The crowd yelled, and they jumped up when the buzzer went off.

as

When the buzzer sounded, the cheering fans leaped to their feet in excitement.

Was Tejas correct in making the revision?

A) No, because the new sentence is much too long.

B) Yes, because the new sentence adds vivid language.

C) Yes, because the new sentence is longer than the first.

D) No, because the new sentence is not as clear as the firs

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Walker Rose · Answer 1

B. When Tejas rewrote the sentence he made it more concise. The sentence is now shorter. It's meaning is understood better. The new, revised sentence has a better flow than the original sentence. In the revised sentence we can see that the crowd leap up because the buzzer sounded. In the original sentence it isn't as clear.