Venice was an interesting destination. You have to travel by boat. We toured a chandelier factory. The colored glass was incredible. We enjoyed the artwork in the museums. The museums were crowded with tourists. What is one important way to improve this paragraph? Add sentence variety. Place the last sentence first. The paragraph should be shorter. Add a topic sentence.

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Yandel Hooper

11 October, 01:50

Venice was an interesting destination. You have to travel by boat. We toured a chandelier factory. The colored glass was incredible. We enjoyed the artwork in the museums. The museums were crowded with tourists. What is one important way to improve this paragraph? Add sentence variety. Place the last sentence first. The paragraph should be shorter. Add a topic sentence.

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Lexi Stein · Answer 1

The correct answer to this question is "Add sentence variety." One important way to improve the paragraph shown above is to add sentence variety. As you read, it's quite plain and very monotonic that it doesn't entice reader. It also doesn't show that much strong emotion for us to feel the excitement of the destination.